GENERAL 5-PARAGRAPH ESSAY OUTLINE Name Class Date I. Introduction a. Attention-getter (anecdotes, facts, statistics, rhetorical questions, description, etc.) b. Background information (narrow down central idea) c. Thesis statement (a claim/assertion that includes a developmental plan outlining your intended argument; list your three main points) II. Body Paragraph #1 a. Topic Sentence (major assertion/point) b. Supporting details (quotes, description, paraphrasing, explanation, etc.) III. Body Paragraph #2 a. Topic Sentence (major assertion/point) b. Supporting details (quotes, description, paraphrasing, explanation, etc.) IV. Body Paragraph #3 a. Topic Sentence (major assertion/point) b. Supporting details (quotes, description, paraphrasing, explanation, etc.) V. Conclusion a. Restate thesis (rephrase main idea) b. Closing thoughts (So what? summary of main points, call to action, quotation, question, reference back to introduction, future)
GENERAL 5-PARAGRAPH ESSAY OUTLINE (Example) Lindsey Sterling s Violin Performance is Exceptional Name Class Date I. Introduction a. Attention-getter (anecdotes, facts, statistics, rhetorical questions, description, etc.) Lindsey s YouTube channel gets enough hits to be in top 100 every week, unique style of dance and play, been on TV. b. Background information (narrow down central idea) There are few YouTube makers like her she is consistently quality and successful. c. Thesis statement (a claim/assertion that includes a developmental plan outlining your intended argument; list your three main points) Lindsey sterling in an exceptional violin performer. She is exceptional because: 1) She creates videos that appeal to non-traditional classical listeners. 2) She has won several awards. 3) She has extremely high video views. II. Body Paragraph #1 a. Topic Sentence (major assertion/point) One way Lindsey show s her exceptional ability is in making videos that appeal to many audiences. b. Supporting details (quotes, description, paraphrasing, explanation, etc.) Legend of Zelda, Pokemon, R+B, and Skyrim videos. III. Body Paragraph #2 c. Topic Sentence (major assertion/point) Lindsey Sterling s showing is evident through the awards she has won. d. Supporting details (quotes, description, paraphrasing, explanation, etc.) Won: Response of the Year at the YouTube Video Awards, #8 Top Viewed Video of 2012; sold out album reached #2 on the charts for classical crossover artists. IV. Body Paragraph #3 e. Topic Sentence (major assertion/point) Lindsey s videos consistently get high views. f. Supporting details (quotes, description, paraphrasing, explanation, etc.) #8 most viewed video of 2012, over 42 Million views on a single video, 3 Million Subscribers, 462 Million views. V. Conclusion g. Restate thesis (rephrase main idea) Through her unique combination of classical music crossovers, award winning performances, and extremely successful YouTube channel, Lindsey Sterling s performance can be considered extremely successful. h. Closing thoughts (So what? summary of main points, call to action, quotation, question, reference back to introduction, future) It would be unsurprising if, in the future, we see more such performers beginning their career on YouTube. Already there are Lindsey-like performers starting their own channels and trying to capture some of that same kind of energy and emotion that Lindsey Sterling has.
Bruce Wayne English III, Semester 2 Rough Draft 11/11/2013 Lindsey Sterling Essay There are few artists like Lindsey Sterling. She combines dubstep and violin in fun performances on YouTube to get many hits. She is feisty and exciting when she performs. This excitement has lead to her being one of the most popular performers on YouTube and in the United States. Lindsey Sterling is an exceptional performer because she creates videos that appeal to non-traditional classical audiences, she has won several awards, she has an extremely high video view count. One way Lindsey shows her exceptional ability is in making videos that appeal to many audiences. Unlike many YouTube creators, she does not stick to one audience. For instance, she often does covers of popular video game songs. She has done videos covering The Legend of Zelda, Halo, and Pokemon. These popular tunes bring listeners to her station where they can listen to her original music and buy her albums. She has been successful in moving many of these viewers to her other non-video game videos. A second way Lindsey sterling shows her exceptional ability is that she has won awards. One major award that Lindsey won was the Response of the Year award for the YouTube Video Awards 2013. This was the first year of the awards and Lindsey was one of 8 YouTube artists to win an award. She also has an album that has gone gold, reaching #2 on the classical crossover artists for the music entertainment billboards. This makes her an exceptional performer. A third way Lindsey sterling shows that she is exceptional is through the fact that her YouTube channel gets consistently high views. As I said above, she had the #8 most viewed video
of 2012 as a part of her channel. One of her videos has reached 42 million views. She has more than 3 million subscribers and 462 million views. Those numbers show that she is an exceptional performer. Through her unique combination of classical music crossovers, award winning performances, and extremely successful YouTube channel, Lindsey Sterling s performance shows that she is an exceptional performer. It would be unsurprising if, in the future, we see more such performers beginning their career on YouTube. Already there are Lindey-like performers starting their own channels and trying to capture some of that same kind of energy and emotion that Lindsey Sterling has.
Bruce Wayne English III, Semester 2 Rough Draft 11/11/2013 Lindsey Sterling Essay Comment [s1]: You need a better title. This one is too simple. Please make a new title. There are few artists like Lindsey Sterling. She combines dubstep and violin in fun performances on YouTube to get many hits. She is feisty and exciting when she performs. This excitement has lead to her being one of the most popular performers on YouTube and in the United States. Lindsey Sterling is an exceptional performer because she creates videos that appeal to non-traditional classical audiences, she has won several awards, and she has an extremely high video view count. Comment [s2]: You say this is important, but do not come back to it. You need to come back to it or remove this comment. Comment [s3]: Make sure and define what this is. One way Lindsey shows her exceptional ability is in making videos that appeal to many audiences. Unlike many YouTube creators, she does not stick to one audience. For instance, she often does covers of popular video game songs. She has done videos covering The Legend of Zelda, Halo, and Pokemon. These popular tunes bring listeners to her station where they can listen to her original music and buy her albums. She has been successful in moving many of these viewers to her other non-video game videos. A second way Lindsey sterling shows her exceptional ability is that she has won awards. One major award that Lindsey won was the Response of the Year award for the YouTube Video Awards 2013. This was the first year of the awards and Lindsey was one of 8 YouTube artists to win an award. She also has an album that has gone gold, reaching #2 on the classical crossover artists for the music entertainment billboards. This makes her an exceptional performer. A third way Lindsey sterling shows that she is exceptional is through the fact that her YouTube channel gets consistently high views. As I said above, she had the #8 most viewed video Comment [s4]: You need to back this up with data. How do you know that she has moved people from her video game music to her non video game music? Comment [s5]: Sterling (capital). Comment [s6]: eight (you need to spell out small numbers). Comment [s7]: Classical Crossover Artists for the Music Entertainment Billboards (capitals) Comment [s8]: Sterling (capital) Comment [s9]: eighth (spell out small numbers).
of 2012 as a part of her channel. One of her videos has reached 42 million views. She has more than 3 million subscribers and 462 million views. Those numbers show that she is an exceptional performer. Through her unique combination of classical music crossovers, award winning Comment [s10]: Compare these numbers to someone else who is generally considered popular so that the reader can see your point. Know your audience. performances, and extremely successful YouTube channel, Lindsey Sterling s performance shows that she is an exceptional performer. It would be unsurprising if, in the future, we see more such performers beginning their career on YouTube. Already there are Lindey-like performers starting Comment [s11]: Lindsey-like their own channels and trying to capture some of that same kind of energy and emotion that Lindsey Sterling has.
Bruce Wayne English III, Semester 2 Final Draft 11/11/2013 Lindsey Sterling A Violinist Unlike Any Other There are few artists like Lindsey Sterling. She combines dub step and violin in fun performances on YouTube to get many hits. She is feisty and exciting when she performs. This excitement has lead to her being one of the most popular performers on YouTube and in the United States. Lindsey Sterling is an exceptional performer because she creates videos that appeal to non-traditional classical audiences, she has won several awards, and she has an extremely high video view count. One way Lindsey shows her exceptional ability is in making videos that appeal to many audiences. Unlike many YouTube creators, she does not stick to one audience. Her main audience is the non-traditional classical audience. This audience is made up of those that like classical instruments such as the violin but who are not looking for performances of classical works. Lindsey does use a violin, but she does not perform classical music. For instance, she often does covers of popular video game songs. She has done videos covering The Legend of Zelda, Halo, and Pokémon. These popular tunes bring listeners to her station where they can listen to her original music and buy her albums. She has been successful in moving many of these viewers to her other non-video game videos. Her nonvideo game videos trail behind her cover songs by less than 5% of her views. A second way Lindsey Sterling shows her exceptional ability is that she has won awards. One major award that Lindsey won was the Response of the Year award for the YouTube Video Awards 2013. This was the first year of the awards and Lindsey was one of eight YouTube artists to win an award. She also has an album that has gone gold, reaching #2 on the Classical Crossover Artists for the Music Entertainment Billboards. Her unique dance style was also featured on America s Got Talent where she
took second place. Her appearance was before she was ever known on YouTube, but her exciting style struck the judges as interesting and unique. This makes her an exceptional performer. A third way Lindsey Sterling shows that she is exceptional is through the fact that her YouTube channel gets consistently high views. As I said above, she had the eighth most viewed video of 2012 as a part of her channel. One of her videos has reached 42 million views. She has more than 3.5 million subscribers and 462 million views. In comparison, Miley Cyrus (also known as Hannah Montana), has only 3.8 million subscribers and 782 million views. Lindsey has never had a TV show featuring her, nor has she been in the news like Miley Cyrus, yet she is close in subscribers and video views. Those numbers show that she is an exceptional performer. Through her unique combination of classical music crossovers, award winning performances, and extremely successful YouTube channel, Lindsey Sterling s performance shows that she is an exceptional performer. It would be unsurprising if, in the future, we see more such performers beginning their career on YouTube. Already there are Lindsey-like performers starting their own channels and trying to capture some of that same kind of energy and emotion that Lindsey Sterling has.